Are there any business on the web that will have someone evaluate your online personals profile and tell what is wrong with it and how to improve it?

Sure,

There are a few. They are called Dating Coaches or Profile Assistants.

I think Online Personals Watch has a directory of them.

There is :
www.ProfileHelper.com
www.CupidsCoach.com
and a myriad of others.

(Dating Coaches.....time to show yourselves!)

Marc Lesnick
Conference Organizer

I am a dating coach.
I do in field work where I approach with clients in clubs, streets or anywhere else.

What I can tell to you right now is that you should post your profile here.

If you are afraid that WE see your profile it will be much harder to attract a woman once you meet her.

So make that first step and post is here.

I know its hard and embarassing but trust me you will gain confidence after you do it.

I know some basics of writing a profile and have dated 7 women cause of it but I am sure many much better experts on writing a profile hang out on this board and you will not find such a concentration of knowledge anywhere else.....and free